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Open Mic: Share Your Poems and Lyrics

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[May. 3rd, 2006|11:19 pm]
Open Mic: Share Your Poems and Lyrics

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[tallerthenlyfe]
new here. i love reading lyrics and poems, and although i'm not very good at writing them, i'll post some and see what you guys think.


the light from the window
was harsh and gray
and the raindrops on the glass
knew what i wanted to say
they wanted me to beg
for someone to hold me,and as
my face became like the windowpane
i waited for the day
i could ask the questions
because i will never be the same

today i'll be crying
today i feel like dying
but i'm waiting for a better day
and tomorrow, i'll pull the knife
out of my chest
and begin to heal
just waiting for a better day
a better day...

and don't you realize
you had me all along?
and don't you realize
i never wanted to hang up that phone.
and don't you realize
you were the one who
made all my days
better days?


comment with whatever you'd like. praise, constructive criticism...bashing--whatever you want.
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[User Picture]From: floydfanatic86
2006-05-12 12:04 pm (UTC)
Very good poem, great use of metaphors and descrpitive language, you describe your feelings very clearly; the whole thing has a great feel to it. It's just too bad this community is practically dead, you and me have made the last two posts, and I just recently joined a few weeks ago myself. I hope this place livens up more, I enjoy sharing my poetry along with reading others.
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